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June 7, 2012
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Please don't cry
I apologize
for whatever I may have done

The sound of your cries
Brought on by my lies
That you were the only one

It won't be the same
If I see your pain
Rest your weeping head in my arm

Your tears fall like rain
Isn't it a shame
That I vowed to protect you from harm

But I hurt you
And you hurt too
That something that I forgot

I'll remain true
Like the sky remains blue
I won't let our love rot

Please don't cry
I deserve to die
For hurting you ever so much

I'll hold you tight
You don't need to wonder why
All you need to do is trust



Seeing me cry didn't hurt
When I lied in the dirt
And you let another woman take my place

The lipstick on your shirt
And the lies you unearthed
The ones you made straight to my face

Do you hear me sob
Was doing this your job

When you cheated and left me alone

My heart you tried to rob
While I wander in the smog
I feel I should let it be known

You hurt me too much
For me to appreciate your touch
Yet you stand hear wanting me back

You used me as a crutch
Why did you treat me as such
You left wounds that I may never patch

Yes I will cry
As I say goodbye
I hope the pain eats at your soul

You'd better not try
To put me back in your life
I hope you've achieved your goal


What's wrong, Please don't cry...
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Bold=man
italics=woman

Another thing I wanted to do was make both of them sympathetic. I want you to tell me, do you somewhat sympathize with this guy, I know he cheated on his girl, but still. I didn't want to make some stereotypical asshole. I wanted there to be sympathy for both of them. I wanted him to have depth, do you pity this guy, or did he just get what was comming to him?
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~XxVINTAGExX Jun 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Absolutey lovely... Brought tears to my eyes
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~extremerebirth1 Jun 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thx
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~XxVINTAGExX Jun 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome! Was this based on a personal event or something that you just thought up?
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~extremerebirth1 Jun 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
something I just thought up
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~XxVINTAGExX Jun 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh well it's very nice, even if it is very sad. You're very talented.
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~extremerebirth1 Jun 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you
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~XxVINTAGExX Jun 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome :)
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