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She couldn't keep her head up
She couldn't keep the gun down
She couldn't keep her hopes high
Now she never makes a single sound

She couldn't help but feel weak
She couldn't hold on for a day longer
No one to wipe the tears from her face
No one to make her feel stronger

Now she's gone

Like a ghost train bound for nowhere

Gone

Like a whisper of smoke rising towards the sky

Gone like a shadow passing through an empty hallway

And nothings going to bring her back


She couldn't keep a smile on her face
She couldn't dry her tears
She couldn't go on with life knowing
She's never felt love in years

She couldn't help but feel helpless
She tried to hold on for one more day
But her grip on life was slipping
Now she's on her way

Now she's gone

Like a single heart engulfed in flames leaving nothing left

Gone

Like a single smile that faded into a frown

Gone to where the tears don't fall and where she's loved

And nothings going to bring her back
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Mood: Sadness =anjourekloos Jun 11, 2012   General Artist
wonderfully written, with a subject that is heartbreaking.
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~extremerebirth1 Jun 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you
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~onlyforyou123 Jun 6, 2012  Student General Artist
I read the title, and I thought about my friend immediately. She killed herself in late march. It's so sad. I love this poem(:
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~extremerebirth1 Jun 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thak you
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~Milkfist Jun 5, 2012  Student Photographer
When life doesn't provide and you feel your world can come to an end.
It would seem like there's more on the other side, so you end your life then and there.

It's sad but true to some.
May all be inspired to live on regardless of what they have and what they don't have.

Contentment, surround all lives.


Beautiful piece :clap:
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~extremerebirth1 Jun 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
so glad you feel that way
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~VicariouSoul Jun 5, 2012  Professional Writer
I wrote a She's-gone-like piece too just recently, lol. And yeah, this is great. Some things in here I read are rather cliche lines BUT other parts of the poem I really enjoyed. It was interesting and the flow was persistent.
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~extremerebirth1 Jun 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thx
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~VicariouSoul Jun 5, 2012  Professional Writer
No problem.
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~NeverTheStar Jun 5, 2012  Student General Artist
I really like this. But,the poem is about a girl who commits suicide. and in the description it says don't kill yourself. Isent that a tad contradictory?
I'm not loved on earth,but I think I wouldn't be loved anywhere elce either. But anywhere...must be better then here.
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